Surreal Landscape Updated
I have continued to rework and refine this piece. Thank you for the suggestions, they have helped with the process. I have lightened the text around the frame and have added a few small graphic elements there as well. I have attempted to get the words on the moon to stand out a bit more by adding a ribbon behind the text and a drop shadow to them, as well. I also moved a line from the waves on the right up into the cloud/constellation area. Let me know what you think.
The type in upper left is perfectly readable now, as is the type in the frame around the edges. Do you want us to read the black type in the sky? If so, that is something that needs more thinking. And, now that I can read the poem itself, I'm not sure I've read it in the correct order. I see that the title/byline is in the bottom right. Would you consider placing it in the top left (where we are used to entering a design) and then we would read it in a clockwise orientation. Thank about it - this is going to be a very strong portfolio piece I think.
ReplyDeleteo wow! it is beautiful and looks different. About design review, I would say that it looks too symmetrical. You probably had a reason to do it this way for sure, but I think if you can reduce that symmetrical balance somehow, it would looks better.
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